October 21, 2012
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Consumed
She plopped down next to me
Blocking me in for the duration
Of the train rideThis large, evil force
Unbeknownst to herself
The seat will smell of her for daysTry to brush it off the sweatshirt
Smell the book
Look out the windowShe keeps reaching for her change
Making sure she has enough money
'Hammond'
She says
That's twenty minutes
But it feels of hoursA cigarette falls out on one
of the attempts to check the change
Making sure she has enough money
To get to that recliner
Or soup kitchenShe breathes outward and inward
As she catches her breath
Audibly sighing as if the lungs are unfamiliar
With physical exertion
This evil woman taking up two seats
In the two seat aisle
She falls asleep
The sweat excretesShe wakes up
Politely apologizes
And heads home
The seat will smell of her for days
I have to move awayConsuming smells
That take my thoughts
I am not an upstanding citizen, Miss
No one apologizes here
Comments (8)
I think that was me!
Ah, the joys of public transportation. You wouldn't do well on the trans-Siberian railway...
Airplanes are worse. Jammed in like sardines, ankles swelling to the size of cantaloups, and nobody will let you find escape in sleep even when you put a blanket over your head. I don't know, maybe that's just me.
Staggering imagery, and terrible, realistic portrait of one possibility of the human condition. Wonderful emotion and well writ; kudos.
Wow, amazing imagery. It really comes to life upon reading it.
This is good and something we can all relate to. Eww, the smell of cigarettes. I wonder if people don't know they smell, or don't care?
I like the way this skates along the edge between callousness and sympathy. Excellent writing, your Nelsoniousness.-
@Roadkill_Spatula - I am glad you said that...as that is exactly what I was going for...